Down to the tweaking

Hi everyone,
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Gotter done. Finished the last poem last night. I probably need eighteen but I wrote twenty-three to be safe and did a couple of versions of two of them.

So now I’m down to the business of polishing, looking for more alliterations and slant rhymes, adding a metaphor here and there, removing a few small pebbles from the flow of meter. Some won’t take long. They’re all worked over pretty well. I might finish up today or tomorrow. That would make me happy because another project is due back with editorial remarks on another project any day and I’d like to clear the way to get to that.

Onward and upward!

David

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2 comments on “Down to the tweaking

  1. Removing Pebbles

    “. . .removing a few small pebbles from the flow of meter.”
    –David Harrison

    Pebbles, he says, I say boulders,
    damming up the tidal poem.
    Makes Hoover look like a vacuum cleaner,
    and beavers pikers compared to poets.

    Pebbles, he says, I say concrete,
    man-made blockage, a wall
    withstanding the powerful push,
    Perhaps it’s prose?

    Pebbles, he says, I say dynamite,
    the only way to go;
    undermine it, work around,
    write an entire new line.

    Never mind the dam.
    Mind the damn.

    Your humble servant,
    Jane

    Poem ©2015 Jane Yolen all rights reserved

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