December W.O.M. poem #6

Hi everyone,

Okay! Okay! I know what I said. But this is really my last. For this one I took a poem from SOMEBODY CATCH MY HOMEWORK and recast it as a villanelle. Here’s the original.

A BETTER ANSWER
by David L. Harrison

Bradley always answers!
We hate it when he answers!
His hand is always shooting up
To make us all look bad.

Teacher says to study.
Study! Study! Study!
Studying’s not the answer –
It’s getting rid of Brad!

© by Boyds Mills Press, 1993
reprinted by permission of the author

And here’s the W.O.M. KNOW poem.

WHAT HE DOESN’T KNOW
by David L. Harrison

Bradley is the smartest kid we know.
Sometimes his brilliant answers make us mad.
We don’t think that Bradley knows it though.

He never looks around to brag or crow.
He’s so nice he makes it twice as bad.
Bradley is the smartest kid we know.

If Bradley only answered just for show,
We could sneer and call him Brad the Cad.
We don’t think that Bradley knows it though.

Instead we sigh and mutter, “Here we go.”
But honestly, who can blame the lad?
Bradley is the smartest kid we know.

Now and then we want to holler, “Whoa!
Don’t you realize you make us sad?”
We don’t think that Bradley knows it though.

He’s never understood he’s causing woe.
In a way it would be better if he had.
Bradley is the smartest kid we know.
We don’t think that Bradley knows it though.

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6 comments on “December W.O.M. poem #6

  1. What a great villanelle! I’m inspired. I’m working on a rhyming picture book and getting the meter to have continuity is a struggle! Thank you, my mentor! The rhythm is the pace; the cadence is the volume!

    • Thank you, Jeanne. I love writing those things. Pat Lewis says that so many American poets have adopted the villanelle that we might as well call it one of our own. Good luck with the picture book!

  2. what knocked me out about this poem, David, was the conflict the kids experience,their mixed feelings about their classmate, liking him but feeling ‘lesser than’ and all of this + craft, creating a lilting, rhyming, rhythmic entertainment

    • Well now, didn’t you just put a smile on my face as I shut down for the evening. Boy am I glad I did that last compulsive check! Thank you, dear Cheryl!

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